Jenthura

Hi, Confictura. Despite the fact that you’re working with a very clichéd idea, you managed to get some original ideas. However, you made a few mistakes. Let me point them ...

Seriously, Azila? You wanted me to review this? Look at all the other ones above! There's nothing left!! Sorry to seem lazy, but I don't think I could mention even ...

Hey, Dcmc, I found this very interesting and, like Elinor, I love sci-fi! I had a little trouble when reading the first paragraph, however. In it, you speak of many ...

Hey, Lily! I don’t know the purpose of the contest, but if it was to merge the words as seamlessly into the story as possible, I’d give you my vote!* ...

I could almost put Chance’s thoughts into words: Jade. What a pretty name. Fits her eyes—so green. Look at the way her hair covers her shoulders…look at the way she ...

Woah, you're totally maxing out on creativity here, B2. I mean, linking together a dream and an idea you had before? Anyways, about the whole three seasons thing. You mentioned ...

Hi, UnicornNerd! Let me see what I can do about your story... Hmm, this isn't really a chapter if you purposefully made it short. You could consider making it a ...

Razcoon and Amelia did great reviews, so there's not much I can say here. With a story as disjointed as this, I normally get confused, but you did an excellent ...

Hi, Megsug, I like what you've done here, but I have a few things to say... I had felt the need to travel abroad. So tired of the daily way ...

Alright! She jumped a little at the sound of his voice. After she had recovered from her surprise she replied , This part does not have an effective voice. Try ...

First of all, it was very hard to read. Not only did you bold and italicize and center it, you jammed it all together into a scary block of text! ...

Hmm, it's obvious you're more used to doing poetry than short stories; this piece's prose is very flowery! I like the style of it, but in some place it can ...

Excellent! I love the idea behind this, and the ominous note it ends with. I noticed a few errors (I queased as she snapped the creature[']s neck) but you could ...

Hmm, you’re writing about something that is very chaotic and full of turmoil, so I suppose your writing should reflect that. However, you shouldn’t go as far as to confuse ...

Hey, Ninja, you’ve got a good thing going here, but you definitely need to work on it some more. The first thing I noticed were technical errors: inconsistency, invalidity, and ...