Jesise

This was amazing, and a really good read! What I love, and what I really think that you pulled of well, was the repetitions. You managed to keep using them ...

It left me hanging backwards I rode two on the tracks breaking free, I'm alone Said you would see me on a warm summer's day You had me breaking farther ...

Wow! This was really good, and easy to read and follow. I can't wait to see where you will take this story, and what kinds of dangers will arrive, for ...

Wow! I really loved this. I noticed that you captured family life really well - and mixing in the royalty part worked terrifically! This was quite a believable first chapter. ...

I loved this! It was easy to read, easy to follow. Your sentences flowed together like water running in a river. Your use of connection adds more to the work: ...

Overall, your story here seems to have been well-thought out, and you seem to know what you are doing. The flow sounds good, but I did notice a few typos. ...

*cries* That was absolutely brillant. I too wonder why some people would deny it happening. I find your poem has very deep emotion, and I like that. I don't think ...