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Re: Gisele Chapter 1
I gathered that in the begining they were both at a party. But i couldnt really see that from the first poem. Maybe drop a couple more sentences in letting ...
May 10, 2008 -
Re: First Kiss
Personally i didn't go for the "pluck up enough courage to hold my hand." i would've used a different word. I would've wrote " It wasn't hard to tell that ...
May 10, 2008 -
Re: Forgotten Diety ( Prologue)
The story got my attention right away. You got some talent :). But the first paragraph i found you rushed into her dads death to quickly. You could do a ...
May 10, 2008 -
Re: .
just backstabbed me and rocked my world, or what was left of it The next day at school; I did my best to look happy but not everything they did ...
May 10, 2008 -
Re: .
just backstabbed me and rocked my world, or what was left of it The next day at school; I did my best to look happy but not everything they did ...
May 10, 2008