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John Locke

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Historical Fiction Re: Chalk Circles - 1

    Hello, my friend. First, ah! A story about magicians! How I do so love magicians. The Bartimaeus Trilogy, for example. I wrote my own story about magicians, though it takes ...

    Jan 3, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Soul's Decay : Chapter One

    Hello, my friend. First, might I say that you have a very bold, dramatic writing voice. Your blunt descriptions of the final moments of this girl and the fox drew ...

    Jan 3, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic Re: All This Time Part 2 of 2

    Hello, my friend. First, once again, I love your writing. I do not often read such truth, but you have placed it before my eyes. It is a welcome gift. ...

    Jan 3, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic Re: All This Time Part 1 of 2

    Hello, my friend. First, you have drawn me in with your writing. Once I saw that this was realistic, I groaned. I detest all realistic fiction, but I read on. ...

    Jan 3, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Ignore

    Hello, my friend. First, might I say that I respect you for writing in the present. I detest it myself, for I do not have the ability to write in ...

    Jan 3, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: *deleted*

    Hello, my friend. First, may I say that you are a fantastic writer. As well, I have finally found someone else who writes with multiple points of view! Ah! I ...

    Jan 3, 2014
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Mad World

    Hello, my friend. First, I loved this premise. The flashbacks, the small child. All of it. And, I was going to put this at the end, but you need to ...

    Jan 2, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: Fragile

    Hello, my friend. First, let me say that I know nothing of the nit-picky poetry rules and whatnot. I can only really focus on how the poem made me feel ...

    Jan 2, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Science Fiction Re: Without A Trace - Chapter One

    Hello, my friend. First, I do not usually focus on grammar unless I am requested to, since I am not gifted in that respect, so I will focus on other ...

    Jan 2, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Teen Fiction Re: Prologue: A Puzzling Victim

    Hello, my friend. First, allow me to say that I did rather enjoy your story. The premise was enticing and I found myself wanting to read on after your little ...

    Jan 2, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Story of Liam - Chapter 1

    Hello, my friend. First, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Your writing created an atmosphere immediately and crafted an image of a world with ease. You were descriptive, but not to ...

    Jan 2, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Howl - Chapter 5

    Hello, my friend. First, a novel of this sort must have some way of explaining the mythos and the nature of the supernatural. Some writers forget that, so I applaud ...

    Jan 1, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Howl - Chapter 4

    Hello, my friend. First, let me applaud you for that twist. Novels of this genre usually keep the supernatural away from the public eye, but you have Blue bounding into ...

    Jan 1, 2014
  • Poetry » Review, Realistic Re: Growing Up

    Hello, my friend. First, I loved this. I often struggle with moving on from the past, so I felt the lingering emotions within each line. The stanzas each seemed to ...

    Jan 1, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Howl - Chapter 3

    Hello, my friend. First, I think that this was a vital chapter. However, you didn't have to be so forward about it. Of course, learning about characters are important and ...

    Jan 1, 2014


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