Jon

This was very good. The only thing I have a comment on is this: Don't end happily I think it would sound better as 'Don't happily end.' Other than that, ...

Feed not on thy soul; For thy soul follows not convention. Render me with your colours And keep me near the wind. In the first line you should consider putting ...

Thien, this was hilarious, and to be honest, a little breathe of fresh air. Ironic huh. Fresh air. XD Anyway, I have to laugh at some of the comments that ...

Hey Farikk. My name is Jon. its unbelievable, undescribeable , untouchable. 'its' should be capitalized and it should be 'It's' with an apostrophe. 'undescribeable' should be 'indescribable'. :wink: j

Hey Kama! My name is Jon. I smell a Midsummer Night's Dream! You might need put put quotation marks around 'Midsummer's Night's Dream'. It's a play, yeah? I would get ...

Hey Chinchilla! My name is Jon. Every body knows your name. Everybody is one word. You beat up nerds for fun. I see where you are going here, but this ...

Though surrounded by others, each one alone With no one to see them to a higher place. I would get rid of 'Though' and put 'Nobody' in place of 'with ...

June gets my 100th review! First off: Gold Star. June, this was absolutely amazing and I felt every emotion attack me. I didn't know you could write poetry like this! ...

Hi Hotaro, it's Jon! (Zero reviews and about to go off the page :?: :!: ) Remember when you said you loved me? Remember when you said you cared, Remember ...

first of all, kudos to you for trying something different! :D *Jon here* Beautiful, Silver, Humongous Birds, Why did you capitalize every first letter of the words? I suggest fixing ...

Hey Tiff, It's Jon. :D She chucked the keys on the hallway table, and staggered into the living room. You make it seem as though she is drunk. I'm guessing ...

Hi Eimear, it's Jon. Let me just say, WOW. This was very good! I do have some suggestions though. :D and through this witching hour of half etherized sleep-- I ...

June! Haha! I don't think here is anything to improve! I loved this. *Gold Star* I pictured the Character as the ginger bread man off of Shrek, I don't kow ...

Hey June! :D It was quiet . This line is EPIC no. XD Just kidding, Maybe you could say, "Silence lived in the air, no one dared breath." Maybe? Tension ...

Hey Snoink, thought I'd take a gander at this... :D Anyway, I like what you have here so far. I think that Jeremy Is bi-polar(Not really). I think that because ...