Jonathan

What are the twin towers Is this a poem or a chapter of a story or something. Very nice rime here and good grammar. Keep Writing. :D

Was with the (so) In the repetition up there. Why the (it was your doom). Why did you repeat that poem up there. A bit to much repetition but it ...

What are you going to say.

In the title the name is daggers i didn't read anything about daggers.

Why did you say in the title (other games).

Sorry I must have not noticed that I thought that Eli was a girls name. But thanks for pointing that out for me.:D.

This is not a review but if you think I am an idiot well maybe I am I didn't mean to be rood sorry but I did read a bit ...

Wait Whimpering UNDER his paws. I couldn't have described a dog better I can imagine the thing that you said and put them together and see a truly majestic dog ...

Much to big. I would cut it in half.

I agree with BlackNether12.:).

Plague might not be the best word there. It is always very hot here. Who are your two characters. Most interesting I think your grammar is very nice but i ...

You could tack out that once upon a time thing. (Well you weren't right going to school didn't make me fell better) might be better. What is a Calculus bot.

Its too big.

Butterfly's in my stomach that sounds a little wrong. That sound wrong do they not drink anything on that planet. I think you might be a bit too serious here ...

sorry about that it is so posed to be a review the first time i tried it.:(.