JoyceSparrows

Hello Scout007, I enjoyed your story very much. I think that you will find that some people will criticize it for being "too wordy", but I quite liked it that ...

Hello, Monsterevo I want to start off by saying that this is a very nice piece you have written. I really liked how you described each place. I thought that ...

I have never reviewed any of your pieces so this is going to be interesting. I noticed that you wanted to include some old English (it’s not really called old ...

Hello. This is a nice poem you have written. I am not going to go into anything regarding theme today, but I do have some general critiques to make. First ...

Welcome YWS! I hope you will enjoy it here. Just one question before I begin. Is this supposed to be a novel or just a short story? I was posted ...

Hello! I think this is pretty good for your first time at writing dramatic poetry. You did a good job with expressing the feeling that a boy might have, although ...

That was absolutely incredible. Normally I don’t like reviewing a story unless I have some critics to give, but I really couldn’t help it. Honestly, I don’t understand how you ...

I enjoyed this story. I have always been against abortions myself and I thought that this was good. the night he rapped me Rapped: He rapped on the door. Raped: ...

Hello! I have got to say that this is the longest short story I have ever read. Generally, people don’t like reviewing something this long. I can give you some ...

I liked this. Sure it was short, but honestly, I don't think anything needs to be added to it. Lots of us have been in similar situations, and we know ...

For a while I thought you might have given up. I’m glad you didn’t! All the mistakes have seemingly been caught, so I don’t really have much to say except ...

Hey! I liked the idea you have going, but it’s just not a story. You need to think about adding to it, because right now it’s just a thought. It ...

I really enjoyed this chapter. I liked the way the character of Rose was developed more. I was too involved in the reading to look for any nitpicks. To answer ...

That was a cute story. I really liked the voice you gave to the dog. The only problem I have is with this sentence: the lady's foot hit ground,the ground ...

Hello I read the first chapter of the novel; you may have noticed my comment on it. The things I said about it still apply to this chapter. Like I ...