Juniper

Hey, Hope! I don't know that I've ever reviewed you before. At any rate, here this goes. :) This short story is straining against itself, almost as if it's got ...

Goodness, Jack. You should write more poetry. The poem started off on good legs, and kept on steadily through most of it. There were a few lines where this grew ...

Hey, Moosie! Totally a candid photo here. I'd recommend casting a 5% blur over the background -- just enough so that the couple is not so much in focus; you're ...

Whoa! How awesome is this? It looks like a rainbow-colored-radioactive-adorable dinosaur! It won't eat Class and Silent, will it? :D Anyway! I would define the eye juuuust a little bit ...

Bahador! The problem with this poem -- aside from the structural parts that people have licked -- is that you are not expressing your view of the theme well enough. ...

Hi, Fixed! Not bad here! I'm with Adnamarine -- it was a little hard to focus, and I ready our note about it being like a fire, so I can ...

Hullo, Vanda, Nice work here. I think you have a steady concept to work with, and I do like your wording style. I have a few nitpicks, though! To every ...

I don't mean to sound preachy or anything, but when you post the avatars up for use, include the link for the original artwork. :D And... I'm due for a ...

Hey, Aloha, In the assumption that this is a song, I think it's decent. (YWS has a separate Lyrics forum for song lyrics). Some of the lines could be versed ...

Hi, Moosie,' I don't know what to make of this, haha. The first three lines were soft, and I couldn't judge by them. Why they did not necessarily hook me, ...

My YWS > Overview > Manage Drafts Let us know if you need anything else! :) June

Hi, Sana Yesterday when i went to the fish market, The pronoun I should always be capitalized, because it's a proper noun. A comma would be in place after yesterday. ...

Hey, Ray! Such a pretty poem! In the third stanza, the first line stumbles. I'm not sure that no more-no reads as smoothly as it should (and as a side ...

Cuuute. It reminds me of a dinosaur. I'd shade the underside of the face-thing, strengthen the darkness of the eye and also shade the ear (?) area. I like the ...

Hallo, Kaywiia! Your username and avatar are the equivalent of epic win. ;) Red is blood on a battlefield, Where a killed soldier lay But that’s too depressing, Let’s not ...