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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Dancing To Death

    Bonjour, Leza! (Remember how I was telling Ahmed how I am a vicious dinosaur, especially when it comes to reviews? ... yeah, it's nothing personal. ;)) It's not too bad ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Baroque Style, 2/2 Time

    Wonderful, wonderful, Hawkie. I agree with Angela on the suggestion that it would be wonderful if the rest of your poem imitated the two final lines of the first stanza. ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: hold your fire, heavens

    (I'm a fan) I really enjoyed this! I like the vivid images you use here. They do wonders at bringing this poem to life. In the second line, you have ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: You aren't Pretty

    Angel! I love how every time I expect something from you, you exceed my expectations. :)This may be a touch cliche, but it's well written. So, naturally, I'm in love ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: she

    Zen, Take this poem slowly. You have so much potential here; this poem is bursting with idea and if not complete originality, it has emotion and tone to it, but ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Peace

    Hey Lyndzie, June here, I think that the problem with this poem is the lack of consistency stops the way of the flow and holds it back. Look here: I ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Bastard I Have Loved

    Awake! I truly enjoyed this. You have a wonderful rhythm, consistent meter, perfect rhyme, and while the poem may not be the most original, I think you've done an absolutely ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Three Words of Pleasure

    Bonjour, Ahmed! June here! :) Let's have a look at this, She lay beside me, completely flat on the bed, With her memorizing body, and her silky brown hair. My ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Yuletide Indiscretions

    Speeeeeele, I enjoyed this poem! The drive of emotion throughout was pretty strong, and that's what I like to see. You drift, though. It's hard to keep track of your ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Grandma [Edit]

    Hey, Lydia! I'm not sure how much I like the rhyme in this; I feel that there are some things about it that could be improved, because some lines feel ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Erithean Seas

    Hallo, Leza! Kyllo did quite a wonderful review there, and I would just say I concur and walk away, buuuut... Good work. I like the ideas you introduce, and in ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Death Clock

    Hey, Flooooower, Okay, let's see! This is decent, but it's just that. I feel like you have bones here with excess fat and not enough muscle; you need to trim ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Love

    Hey, Bailey! Long time, no see. :) This is cute; I like the description of love, but why make it so outward? If you had used first person and said ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Carpe Diem (We will not be forgotten) [Working Title]

    Hallo, Spike! Nicely done! I quite like the basis on idea that you've built in this; it's rather creative, although some parts do stand some room for improvement. Let's see: ...

    Jan 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: i want it

    Hey there, Britt! Welcome to YWS! This isn't so bad, but I think you should elaborate a little more, probably give us a bit more on setting and why she ...

    Jan 18, 2010


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