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Re: "Ballerina" The first Chapter (edited)
Chapter 1 The Opera The lights dimmed in the Palace Garner Opera house, all the talking from the gentlemen and high class ladies,[b]no need for a comma. hushed.(How they were ...
Jan 24, 2009 -
Re: A Blessing and Curse.
I can help you pretty good since I write songs myself. Well first of all the basic thing about writing a song, is making sure you have some kind of ...
Jan 24, 2009 -
Re: On the Road of India
Nice...but you spelled which was "witch". I've been to Indian before. You were lucky to find someone like him. But be careful, a lot of people can use you. Anyways, ...
Jan 24, 2009 -
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Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: I Drew a Smiley on my Knee
The beginning totally missed the beat of the poem. You want to end good, and I don't really even understand the last stanza honestly. Overall it was ok. I guess ...
Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: Running free.
Hm, well I agree. The first sentence IS confusing. In some parts you capatalized things you weren't supposed to, but I didn't happen to find any spelling mistakes which is ...
Jan 18, 2009