KJ

I like to know what it going on in a story before giving an opinion. So I really can't on this. It was unclear and vague. If you meant it ...

To be honest, I didn't really like it. I found it mostly dull, and nothing struck me about it. The biggest problem I had with it was your beginning - ...

To be honest, I didn't really like it. I found it mostly dull, and nothing struck me about it. The biggest problem I had with it was your beginning - ...

It was interesting. A pretty intriguing start. You NEED spacing, badly. Have no more time to say anything else, but I did like it.

This was a really neat idea. I liked it. But I would like to know more about your MC. Perhaps a bit more background and dialogue between her and her ...

I really have nothing negative to say and everyone else covered the critiques. So here's what I have to say: I liked your descriptions, a lot. Keep writing.

Need spacing. I can't read anything this clumped together.

Did you two do the eyeball avatars on purpose? Just curious... Anyway. I thought this was pretty well-written. However, I would just cut all the narrative in the beginning and ...

Hello. Very creative, I have to say. However, I felt that it was a bit confusing. I also felt that there were too many loose ends - of course you ...

This was pretty good. I have almost nothing negative to say. The only problem I had was your hook - the very first line. Instead of saying Sunday night downtown, ...

You did it again. I loved it. Can't wait for the next one. Get writing so I don't have to! =P

I like this. Interesting ideas. Very bittersweet. The only thing I did not like was the whole black-and-white thing. I felt that it took away from the story.

Hey Ash. There were only a couple things I noticed - but as you know I don't really have time to go and fully critique it. My overall impression: Great. ...

This was pretty short. Is it meant as a chapter, prologue, or forst part of just a short story? As to my opinion, I thought that it was decently written. ...

Samuel Garrison - Those are some excellent points. Thanks. I'll get to work on them soon. As to a question and a statement you made: Was Alpha Six a real ...