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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Noise

    Hi Amy, At first I found myself getting quite bogged down in the writing here, which I think is suffering from a case of redundant redundancy, but as I read ...

    Jan 5, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The First Christmas (1)

    Hi Elinor, I enjoyed the many Christmas references in this piece. Finding them is like a treasure hunt! Rudolph and the Scrooge references might be obvious, but Christian’s first name ...

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Angels and Vampires-Part 6

    Hi forgotten, I’ve read everything you’ve posted so far, so this is a review of the story as a whole. Overall, while I enjoyed the description and thought the imagery ...

    Jan 3, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: A Vampire's Tears ~ Chapter 1

    Hi VL, Just adding a few more comments to Tex's excellent review. The opening paragraph where Leiya speaks directly to the audience feels kind of patronising to me. I'm not ...

    Jan 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Cat Steps [2] DRAFT

    Hi Rosey, It’s refreshing to read something that is fundamentally well-written. The writing here is clean and readable, and I enjoyed the world-building. And I think that’s why I feel ...

    Jan 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Wrong Side Ch. 1

    Hi Hippie, I’m glad you asked me to review this, because I enjoyed it. It’s dramatic, the opening is punchy and the writing is clean. I love your use of ...

    Jan 2, 2010
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Redwall by Brian Jacques

    I wish I could read Redwall books for my classes. :P I still have a huge nostalgic love for the Redwall series. It's repetitive at times, and the bizarre racist ...

    Dec 31, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Chaos Flame

    Hi Garland, Reviewing as per your request. I'm afraid I had difficulty with this story. It's riddled with spelling and grammar errors: the very first sentence has at least two. ...

    Dec 30, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Forest Sonata

    Hi Kamas, Harsh review on request! While I like the imagination you put into your writing, overall I felt that the sheer weirdness of some of the images, and the ...

    Dec 29, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Dream-Maker by Nathan D (Prologue/Chapter 1)

    Hi Nathan, This review might sting a little, so please take a deep breath before reading on. I can tell from the first paragraph alone that this novel is not ...

    Dec 29, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Demon's Deal (Chapter 1, Maybe)

    Hi Binkatong Quick review today. Overall, I found the beginning meandering, but I enjoyed the story much more when the plot kicked in. The writing is fluent and easy to ...

    Dec 29, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Last Storm (1)

    Hi Classy, As a frame , I rather like this. I'm pleased that the narrator is a grumpy elderly woman, subverting the unfortunate tendency for female characters to be (a) ...

    Dec 28, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: katy lost her virginity yesterday

    Flit, this is superb. Powerful voice, good use of stream-of-consciousness, and some sharp ideas - I particularly liked the traffic light. Start looking for appropriate markets to send this to, ...

    Dec 28, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Alone

    Hi summergrl, I think the writing here is fine, but when I look at the piece as a whole, I feel like the repetition is killing it. You establish in ...

    Dec 28, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Bloodlust & Bloodloss

    Hi iCarly, Just a quick review today. I enjoyed this - the opening lines are great, the writing is fluent and the homelessness is a new twist on the familiar ...

    Dec 27, 2009


Maybe what most people wanted wasn't immortality and fame, but the reassurance that their existence had meant something. No matter how long... or how brief. Maybe being eternal meant becoming a story worth telling.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Nectar of Immortality