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KayLou1609

  • Poetry » Realistic, Culture Re: Southland

    Hi there! Here to leave a review! Grammar 1) "and we'd had a hard days work beforehad" - should be "and we'd had a hard day's work beforehand" 2) "So ...

    Aug 22, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Satire Re: Insubstáncial

    Hi there! First of all, I really like how the poem is set out. The way you start each stanza with a different age, and gradually increase the ages from ...

    Aug 20, 2017
  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic Re: i am

    Hi there! I absolutely love the similes and metaphors you've used to emphasise your points made as it paints a brighter picture for the reader and adds to the really ...

    Aug 19, 2017
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Romantic Re: Beauty is Truth

    Short and sweet! Although there is very little imagery used, it allows the reader to create their interpretation of the poem, and it also avoids the 'telling instead of showing' ...

    Aug 19, 2017
  • Poetry » Narrative, Literature Re: I Smile

    This is really good! I love the imagery and the language you've used to create such an emotional poem. The limited word count per line is a well-chosen decision as ...

    Aug 19, 2017
  • Poetry » General, General Re: kuala lumpur

    This is a really good poem. I love how you've chosen such an original theme and the language you've used has painted a large picture in such a few lexical ...

    Aug 19, 2017


You walk into this room at your own risk, because it leads to the future, not a future that will be but one that might be. This is not a new world, it is simply an extension of what began in the old one. It has patterned itself after every dictator who has ever planted the ripping imprint of a boot on the pages of history since the beginning of time. It has refinements, technological advances, and a more sophisticated approach to the destruction of human freedom. But like every one of the super states that preceded it, it has one iron rule: logic is an enemy and truth is a menace.
— Rod Serling