Kaylyn

First I want to say sorry its so short but I am extremely busy and I will have the next chapter up soon. -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

THanks guys for the help. This is my first attempt at writing a book so I need the critique. Rest assured this book will be NOTHING LIKE TWILIGHT(I loved the ...

Thanks guys for all of ya'lls help. Hopefully the book is a lot better and I hope you like it. Be assured this will be nothing like Twilight or any ...

Okay I edited it, thanks ya'll for helping me out. You helped me with the mistakes I overlooked and gave me alot of help. I will let you know when ...

I really love your story so far. Let me know when you continue it! Anyways good job on improving your story. Good luck with your future writings!

This is my rough draft. So i would like it if you used the edited and new version of the story, Half-Blood. Thanks for all the help.

Thanks for all the constructive critiques, they really help my writing. I have now edited it so hopefully its alot better now!

Midnight Horror Island August 15 I know this was mentioned earlier, but could you give a year? 1:39 a.m. Ring......ring.... Marissa Calhoun burst out of the nightmare by the sound ...

The day seemed to drag along so slowly after science. I plopped down next to Karisa at lunch. Tyler, Alexis, and Courtney were also sitting there. I poked at my ...

Beep. Beep. Even though I heard my alarm, I didn’t even think about getting up. I was not tired, though. I was in that state you get into right after ...

Beep. Beep. Even though I heard my alarm, I didn’t even think about getting up. I was not tired, though. I was in that state you get into right after ...

The incoming sunlight woke me the next morning, tha alarm clock had broken again. I was supposed to wake up at 6:45, I glanced at the clock that read 8:00. ...

Okay I am going to critique it so here goes, and also make sure you rate it R because you did use very strong language. Stepping out of his cabin, ...

Okay I am going to critique it so here goes, and also make sure you rate it R because you did use very strong language. Stepping out of his cabin, ...

Okay right now it is sounding a little boring, you have to make a great first impression. You have to make them not able to put it down. The description ...