Kel

I liked this. I was kind of curious about the ears on Adel, though. Nothing else of his features seemed to stand out, so it made me think of a ...

It was a miserable evening. Rain fought its way through a cracked sky (omit comma) lined with hazy, dark clouds that blocked out all forms of light. The moon, hidden ...

I'm not sure about the structure of prologues since I never do them, but I wasn't pulled in. It felt rushed. I know a prologue is there to get you ...

I can honestly say that this is very realistic. Very. It touched a spot in me. I used to work at a coffeeshop and my own husband (after we were ...

I'm in the same boat as Bianca. You say they're at a horse camp but there's nothing to denote that it's there. Just the mention of it and the horses ...

YA is what I aim to write for. The thing I like about YA is the fact that the storlines aren't quite as ... engrossed with nitty-gritty details about primary ...

I really liked the ending a lot. The only real "errors" I found were grammatical. I've left an edited version (edits in bold) on your desktop for you to read! ...

[spoiler]Some people do rather marry those they were together with in high school. I did. I started dating my husband when I was 13 years old. I'm 25 now and ...

Not so far into it, I can already see something that I don't really like: You skip over the setting. What do these rooms look like? Is her room well-lived-in? ...

Gorgeous. I only found some minor grammatical errors but I wasn't sure if you wanted to be critiqued or not. There weren't any author notes anywhere. I really like the ...

I liked this. I liked to think that the whole thing with the first part about his home was ... well, like it was so close to his own home ...