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KelsRich1

  • Short Story » General, General Re: Conflict Between a Writer and His Characters

    This was very cute. It was almost metafiction, which I like. I liked how the piece was short and sweet, some tend to drag on and on. Sorry this is ...

    Jul 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: What is

    Your grammar was dead on, unless I missed something haha. So good job. I liked this poem it was cute. :) -Kels :D

    Jul 3, 2011
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Meeting of Romeo and Juliet

    I LOVED THIS! I really like how you took the original narration, third person omniscient, changed it to first person with Juliet. There were a lot of really great metaphors ...

    Jul 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Crash.

    I like the way this poem flows. It feels like you're in a crash as you read it. It's a really cool effect. There were some grammatical errors. Sometimes it' ...

    Jul 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Good Morning

    I liked this poem. I liked how you compared the storm to baking and typewriting. I also like how you used caesura and enjambment throughout the poem. It made the ...

    Jul 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Far Away and Long Ago

    This is a good poem. I liked it. If you want help with grammer on a poem the best way to do it is write it like a regular paragraph ...

    Jul 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: On Going War

    This poem is very powerful. Maybe work on clarifying certain parts PM me and we can go into details. Sorry this review is so short I'm in a rush but ...

    Jun 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Crepuscule

    This was a great poem! I really liked it. The only thing that was a little off to me was that there were a lot of run-on sentences. I do ...

    Jun 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Intelligence

    This was a good poem but the rhyme scheme was a little weird. It changed throughout the entire poem and it kind of threw me off when I was reading. ...

    Jun 29, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Wisdom of the Wisdom Tooth

    WOW! That was a really good story. I know this is going to be a pointless review but I didin't really find anything wrong with it. There wern't any gramatical ...

    Jun 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: For the Love of the Hero

    This was cute and it had a nice meter in the begining. However, some words needed a space between them that they did not have. For example: "cheersengulf" I realize ...

    Jun 28, 2011
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Oracle

    Oh.My.Gods. This was really fun to read. I like how you're using May, a lot of poeple do something with Percy and Annabeth and truthfully, it just gets old. Anyway, ...

    Jun 28, 2011
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Harry Potter, Voldemort and a cookie.

    Oh my gods! A cookie and Harry Potter!?! If only Ron were there....hahah. Anyway it was really cute and funny. I would just edit the ending a little. Maybe make ...

    Jun 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Bumblebee's Journey

    That was really cute! I loved the imagry and the way you describe the way the bee moves. I never thought about it like "jamming to tunes" hahah. Keep it ...

    Jun 27, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: ...Make Lemonade

    This was really good! I liked that the conflict was so original and unique. My favorite part was the ending; I love a good twist like that. Personally, I like ...

    Jun 27, 2011


Love is friendship that has caught fire. It is quiet understanding, mutual confidence, sharing and forgiving. It is loyalty through good and bad times. It settles for less than perfection and makes allowances for human weaknesses.
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