Kiwisatsuma

Hey! :) If I could have gone into my heart that night, I would have introduced you to the ruins that Eric had left me into . I really like ...

Hey there! :) I like this, especially the way you fitted so much drama and excitement into a fairly short story. A few small nitpicky things to polish up: Towards ...

Hey there! :) This was very well written and it sounds like a fascinating setting for a story. I really hope you post more here! But while this extract certaintly ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! :D I really liked this, especially the description of the car wreck on the road. Still, I think there are ways you could improve it. ...

Hey! :) First off I have to say that I love the concept of this. Dogs having a conversation = bound to be awesome. :smt003 I do think that there ...

Hey again! I'm glad you decided to continue this! :D I like the changes you made to the prologue, although I still think it could be clearer that it was ...

Hey there! :) Wow! I wasn't expecting that ending at all, and it worked really well. :D You managed to fit a lot into such a short story. Still, I ...

I agree with you, the Church is very split, but it's been splitting for centuries, and unlikely to unite any time soon because Christianity covers such a broad spectrum of ...

I don't really agree with it. Perhaps it could work with a mutual agreement between three people, but any more than that and it begins to be like a man ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS and I hope you enjoy your time here! :D So, you described this as a snippet in your author's note, and that's certaintly what it ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! :smt003 Nawwww, that was cute. :3 It's always nice to read a story where the nice guys end up together. “That was real low for ...

Hey there! :) Hmm, I like this, especially the way your main character already has her own distinct personality. It seems like an interesting beginning to a novel. A few ...

Hey there! :) This is well-written and definitely intruiging. I have just a few nitpicks: Six short, fast years was all it took In this context chort and fast mean ...

Hey! :) I haven't ever read the Rime of the Ancient Mariner, but I know the general plot of it, and I love the way you've retold it. You have ...

I'd like to do at least five, and then more once I've got some homework out of the way.