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Re: Chapter 4
The Thorn confrontation is the sequence in this passage. Dylan’s physical flinching, the shaky "Y-yes ma’am" stutter and the way his authority from the scene just fades away—like it never ...
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Re: Chapter 15
The dialogue between Raven and Dylan feels sharp and natural. It carries tension as they argue though the nickname "little Blackbird" starts to feel repetitive by the third time. The ...
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