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Okay, I'm not sure why you wanted me to review since I see you've gotten two very good ones :D But anywho, all-in-all I found this a very refreshing and ...

Excellent beginning but after the first few paragraphs I was starting to wonder when you were going to stop using the main characters name. Sorry if I'm sounding rude, but ...

Good story, but it started a bit slow. Also there were quite a few things I caught but reading the above persons reply I'm not going to repeat them. But ...