LMAuthor312

I really, really like what you've written here. It's slightly suspenseful and eerie. I had to reread it a couple of times because I felt like I kept missing pieces ...

I love it. Very well written and I can feel the love behind the words. Very few people manage to get feelings across through words, but you managed it beautifully.

Overall, good story. Needs a little polishing and some more details. I don't feel the same excitement as Mark and our narrator. I think if you add some more details ...

Overall, good story. Needs a little polishing and some more details. I don't feel the same excitement as Mark and our narrator. I think if you add some more details ...

Thank you for the review! Yes, I think this chapter and the following ones will change plenty over time, but I appreciate the critique! Any help is appreciated and you ...

Thank you very much for the review! I'll go back through and edit those things. Grammar is something that's hard to notice when editing on your own, so I greatly ...

Thank you so much for reviewing! I have a really hard time keeping the "tense" in my writing consistent. I'm still working on ways to notice it. This was just ...