Laminated

Good call all around :) Thank yah!

Hi! Laminated here :) I loved your lack of punctuation and capitalization. Sometimes it can seem like the poet is trying to hard, but with this piece the effect to ...

Not a review, this is a comment; but this was a delight to read. Thank you for breathing life into an ageless style! Well done all around.

This spoke to my soul. Please never stop writing

It's an interesting idea but you need a lot more description. Your short story has all of the elements of the retelling of events, but little of the spinning of ...

Just a comment, but this was fantastic to read. I was hooked at the beginning and it was terribly interesting. The last two paragraphs were a most delightful finishing punch! ...

The length is perfect to tell a story and give your message :3

Beautiful. Thanks for sharing.

First, since you were worried about characterization, I'll assure you that the protagonist was sufficiently shown, I think. The girl needs work, since the most effective females in stories are ...