Lancrist

I might have found the book an exciting read if I had read it one hundred years ago. I forced myself through it because, hey, it's Dracula. And yes, the ...

I could talk to you about some structural/wording issues to do with this, but I think what you have to work on first is the actual content on the story. ...

Firstly, I don't agree with what fairy had to say. Secondly, I think it was written well and you did a good job at building the imagery. I got the ...

The Red Road Home Prologue Doors that had remained sealed for decades were heaved open. Etched against the burning white daylight stood the silhouette of a man. Before him light ...

Thank you everyone for your advice and comments. I know that on its own it is quite short, but it will be fine with a story following it. I'm currently ...

Well... I edited the post and now my beloved indents are gone and won't come back, so I guess the problem is solved. Thanks.

Thanks. whispered a gravely voice -- apparently Microsoft Word denounces the existence of gravel. plane = plane However, since it seems a bit obscure, I can use a synonym.

Doors that had remained closed for decades creaked open. Light spilled into the ebon chamber, etching from the darkness a double row of tall pillars, a high black altar-- --and ...

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Haha. Pretty good. "Why-baby" is the funniest name I've heard in a while. That alone cracked me up.

Fix up the shading -- it doesn't need it, but what you have is out of place. Anatomy--this is all pretty picky, so I was sort of dubious as to ...

Evidently you did outdo me. Punk. :(

*                                                         Too Beautiful The most beautiful woman in the world lived alone by a river.      �

Well, today I wanted to write but didn't have any ideas for a longer story. So I just picked something small and decided to do a short story as an ...

*shudders at the thought of wearing uniforms* I know wearing them can promote equality and all that, but I prefer not to look like everyone else. I'd protest against having ...