Leapy

I will agree it is a bit easier to read then the last, although still not quite. The fact that you didn't capitalize a new sentence was sort of off ...

Well as a girl.... I have to say that It does have potential. It seems a little rough still like there would be a huge hole with her being in ...

I've always wrote on the intent to be published... which is probably why I have such a hard time writing. I get sidetracked about thinking what my friends and family ...