Lena.Wooldridge

Some parts seem slightly cheesey, like they were taken straight out of a history book. "Hey! You there, doughboy! Do you see anything Boche?" I ask, using a slang term ...

My family has lived upon the steppe for a hundred years, if not longer. I myself was born among the cattle in the fields themselves, as my mother could not ...

This isn't the best thing I've ever written. I'll say that right off. The basis for this is a conversation my friend Dane and I had one night when we ...

I'm rather confused about the ending... Did they kill him or something? I don't think they euthanize autistic people... But, other than that, this was really beautiful and sad. Sometimes ...

Cliches were all obviously good at one point, otherwise they wouldn't be considered overused now. I think everyone has their own version of cliche. When I think of cliche, I ...

Hey there! This was very beautiful and heart warming, I have to say. Like the other reviewer, I'm a sucker for a good historical fiction as well. I'm also working ...

It really depends on the audience. If you're writing for middle school aged kids, then obviously you should keep the swearing to a minimum. It's all about creating a believable ...

Hey, can you take a quick look at this? Does not need an in-depth grammar analysis/thematic analysis or whatever. Thanks alot. Lena

Disclaimer: I am not considering otherworldly fantasy in this post. Partly because it is entirely asinine, but mostly because I am not aware of whatever laws or traditions exist in ...

First off, this should be in "Fanfiction," not general fiction. The language in this was very beautiful. To be honest, I like the way it is written, for the most ...

Hahaha what the hell man. sounds like a few of the kids at my school

I would recommend putting what Ophelia says in the dreams either into quotation marks or italicizing them, so it makes them easier to read. There were a quite a few ...

The semicolon in the beginning of the second paragraph is used incorrectly. I really like how you touched on the topic of Barbies, because I can totally relate to that ...

First off, remember that the quotations are to be put in standard quotation marks ( " " ), not the [ quote ] option on the sidebar when you post. ...

Please fix the semicolon you have in your first paragraph. It is used to incorrectly that it scares me. Thank you.