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My parents named me Alice. And that name was fine. For a 6 year old girl. But I was no longer 6 . And I was no longer Alice. This ...

PLEASE COMMENT! Please don't put those up there. If people want to comment, they will. Fear clenched at me, seizing up through my veins. Fear clenched you? Change it, it ...

I've read all 12 Dresden File's books. I would say Dresden File's is a mix of Harry Potter and Sherlock Holmes with adult humor. The entire series is good, and ...

Okay...its been awhile since I've posted anything on this book...please no rude critiques...(is that spelt right) I don't want harsh comments, there is no reason to say hurtful things to ...

the Nora's 16 year old child was normal sized Spell out numbers unless they are years or really large. Also, what is "normal sized"? "Normal sized" can be different where ...

If you think the words sound cliche, then change them. “If this is the best you can do, seems like you were abandoned even before you arrived.” I have read ...

Firstly, put space in-between paragraphs. It makes it much easier to read. Secondly, always edit before posting. Not everyone likes to sift through an un-edited story and find every mistake ...

her deep , hazel eyes set solely upon the distant horizon. Comma after deep. Along with her younger sister , Lucy, Comma after sister. where individuals, couples , or even ...

The moon slowly moved over the sun, its curve forming a dark silhouette that crept across the bright face, moment by moment darkening the sky. I would suggest making this ...

exuding some harsh , innate gleam. First off, comma after harsh. Secondly, the wording on this is weird to me.Try changing the wording. Immediately , she had gushed to the ...

I mean , not just me , but everyone who knew me knew that. " . . . not just me . . . " is kind of like an ...

Firstly, I know it says short stories, but this is very short for a short story. The sharp prickers poked and pinched at my ankles, and I winced . What ...

I mean, they all looked so silly[b], them[b] with their medieval weaponry. The bold part bothered me. I think it sounds better with the comma and them omitted. Overall: Good ...

Back at my old home in New York, my mom had gotten a promotion to her already high-paying position at the company job . sat in front of the T.V ...

Paul Holiday lives in a small sea-side town called Nichols Bay ; there isn’t much there , a post-office, a general store, a cafe, a hotel, a bait and tackle ...