Lethero

Good poem, never really liked poems but this one was good.

:D Awsome story I can't what to see it when it's finished. If you get it published I'll get it and read it all and show it off.

I just don't get. It looks like a weird story by some person who has way to much time on their hands.

I would say it's Science-Fiction like the first person. It's good and I look foward to the next part.

If you see anything that needs changed please don't keep it a secret I'm new at this and need another readers tip i could use to make my story more ...

It's good but why have some one die so quickly into it. But otherwise if I was a teacher I would give it a very high A.

I learned this from my english teacher and she said that everytime there is a different speaker in a story you have to make a new paragraph. Don't know why, ...