Liaya

Well, I like this so far! You do a fairly good job introducing the characters as they come, and I especially enjoy your description of Rendell. It makes me curious ...

I love it! Really the only line I noticed that didn't feel right is the same as BTubz, and I agree with their way of fixing it. So I get ...

Okay, kudos. Seriously. I can't believe I read this. I haven't read any of the previous novel--and I NEVER start in the middle--and I don't like vampire stories, and I ...

I feel like this is a really great start--you've got some gorgeous imagery happening and the way the words sound is wonderful. However it doesn't really make sense. I suppose ...

Hey! You've already had a really detailed review and I'm short on time, so I'll just sum things up. First of all, I like this--it's good start, and while there ...

I like it! I think it's really beautiful, even if it's a little dark and sad. It also makes me wonder if you're literally talking about the bird or if ...

Okay I like the concept of your poem here! I'm just going to go over the technical stuff real quick. I really like your first line. However in the next ...

I think this is very well-written. It's quite an eerie take on old age and the way it traps a person; they way you describe it is unpleasant and yet ...

Oh. Why is it someone else can put something in to word so well when I've tried to do the same thing for so long? All I can say is ...

I really like this! I think it's beautifully written and I love the way you describe walking down a road of regret and the metaphors you have. You do a ...

This is really sad! But…it's an experience most go through at some point, I'm afraid. I think you portrayed it really well. I enjoy the simplicity of this poem; you ...

Wow, I really love this! Usually I start out a review thinking I can look for what needs improving, but sometimes the content is so good I get drawn in ...

I love this! I have felt this way many a time, and you capture it beautifully. I like the freestyle of your poem and the way it flows. I think ...

You've had someone else nitpick the story for you, so I'll just tell you what I thought of it. I really like this. I think it's a great idea, especially ...

All right. To begin with, I love how you set this up; the way you write gives beautiful insight to your mind and emotions. (Or whoever the narrator is if ...