Lil_Pau

Hey KnightlyAngel09! This poem was great, especially your use of adjectives and wording. I like the rhyming scheme too - it fits the poem. There are some phrases such as ...

Hey there! I absolutely love the imagery here - while reading your poem, I could just imagine the scene of the cathedral, the forest... nice job! =) Only one thing: ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! =) It's been a long time since I had reviewed or posted anything on YWS, so let's get started with the review, shall we? ;) ...

Hi there! I thought that this piece was OK. It wasn't too bad - I like the mysterious tone of the story. However, at the same time, it sounded a ...

Hi there! Actually, this poem was quite good. I liked the fact that you used a butterfly as a metaphor. The only problems I had were: 1) Punctuation - Although ...

Hey there, welcome to YWS :) Let me remind you that before posting a piece of work, you must post at least 2 reviews. Anyway, back to the poem. To ...

I like the Demonata series. Most of Darren Shan's books are simple in writing, but they're entertaining. He's great at those descriptions of gore too xD. - You said this ...

Wow. This is a strong subject to write about, and I'm glad you did it, because like angel23 mentioned, it's a common topic yet complex to express out. I like ...

Sorry, azzman, but I think I have to agree with smorgishborg and Snoink. The whole poem seems like words thrown together into one big mound. Yes, we have the words ...

Hiya there! I thought that this poem had some lovely imagery - for example, the first three stanzas. However, I thought that the ending was a bit too abrupt - ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! Now, to the story... I personally thought it was just OK. I hope I'm not offending was not too bad and not too good. The ...

Hi there! This was not bad, but as Rosey mentioned, I didn't like the repetition of 'fear not.' Nitpicks: Fear not the dangers of the world, They cannot fight against ...

Hey there! I thought this poem had a really nice concept. However, I didn't like some parts, and I'll emphasize it here - A beautiful soul , loving and giving ...

I like this. It's simple but has a whimsical-like manner to it. I'd like to do nitpicks, but since lilymoore has done 'em, I'll just point out one thing: When ...

Nice job! It was short and simple, but straight to the point. It really shows how much you want to protect that particular person. I cannot find any errors as ...