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Thank youuuuu this is super helpful! Thanks for the grammar tips especially, I'm not sure how I didn't spot that :)

Thanks for your review! It's super helpful, and I'll definitely use your feedback. I guess I didn't think about my narrator having an opinion, it's more of a stream of ...

Thank you! Reading it back it definitely isn't clear, the speaker is lying on their bed looking at the wallpaper and thinking about freedom but I don't ever actually say ...

Thanks for getting back to me! The quoting thing is helpful, I don't know how to use this site yet. Just pure curiosity what do the last 3 lines mean? ...

Ooo exciting I'll read when I get a minute :)

It starts in iambic then switches to trochaic then back to iambic then it loses metre for a bit before going into heptameter. Basically it's confusing and therefore the poem ...