Livinginfantasy

That title was horrendous! At least put in an A/N that is the only poem I'll hear from you, not as the title, please! Now on to the review! It ...

I honestly didn't find anything wrong. At least something that sticks out to me. I like how it has some kind of hidden message while trying to lighten the mood ...

Camp

The promise of utopia always hanging over our heads, we follow dutifully. Utopia remains elusive. Hell remains. I... Loved... That... Ending! And title! The rythym was very nice. I was ...

Hmm... I see where this is going. But, I have to say this is indeed lacking. Then again, that as an element that I liked. not that it's a good ...

I have to agree with Liz, I do feel you are shoving it down my throat. Try making it smoother and showing me. I want to see Russia and the ...

Characterization. I felt that was the biggest flaw in this piece. It was very nice I must say, but coming from a five year old? If this was a flashback ...

What a very nice perspective! I love the idea and the ending. As others have said, it's great that you just didn't come right out and say, "hey, it's a ...

Is it just me, or when you read this aloud, it sounds like a song? That was a nice effect. Wonderful word choice too... I like! Its shadow falls across ...

*sniffle* Oh man! That was so sweet! You're friend will have to keep this in thier pocket wherever they go... I know I would! Nice description words. Beautiful poem. :smt022

Timmy First crush!

Hilarious! Woah, I'm jumping back 4 years, but, I just wanted to see anything that was made a while ago. And I am so glad I did, this is so ...

Redhead

*tear* AH! So sad. But, I believe it would've been stronger if you told it from her point of view. Characterization is a big in something like this, in my ...

AWWWWWW! That was so sweet! Apart from a few grammatical errors, which I'm sure were pointed out, that was the cutest. I seriously almost cried. I literally said 'aww' so ...