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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Game

    This was awesome and it should've been featured... if only you edit it first. Alright, in a recent review I told someone that rhythm was an important aspect in free ...

    Aug 20, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The City of Elementals, Chapter 1

    Hm... differing from the crowd here. I'm sorry g, but I don't think that was well presented. Firstly, until I read the reviews, I wasn't too sure if it was ...

    Aug 20, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Prose Poetry- The Tree

    Heya, TheNewHero here to review... I really am not sure that you portatryed this poem well. Asp.Author, can you write a sentence or two about exactly what this poem is ...

    Aug 9, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Ocean Ripples

    Tell your eight year old daughter that she could write her own Calvin & Hobbes. I think the best thing to do is to keep her stories short though, preserve ...

    Aug 7, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: What Happens after life?

    Heya, I'm TheNewHero! How about I review your poem today? My general impression of this poem was that it was bland. Basically you were just asking questions. I couldn't figure ...

    Aug 7, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Proxide X

    I disagree, Nem. If there was some kind of field obstructing all the scanning stuff... Smex, I'm not hooked. You need to up this... up. :arrow: Firstly, your title Your ...

    Jul 11, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: Pushing Fate...A kinda Percy Jackson Spin off

    TheNewHero here for a quick review. Okay, first of all let me say I love Percy Jackson and by the way there's anew series coming out: The Heroes of Olympus ...

    Jul 5, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: don't have a name yet (edited)

    Hi there, thanks for the great piece. I really liked your style of writing. Your piece is so light-hearted... it's been a long since I've read something like this, a ...

    Jun 21, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Taint of Red (Working Title) Chapter 2

    This story has potential, but you're still missing it. Don't be afraid of breaking 'realism'. A few points you need to address, :arrow: Katarrina needs a shorter name :arrow: Katarrina ...

    Jun 21, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Taint of Red (Working Title) Chapter 1

    Much better, but I'm still unconvinced (Meh, I'm tough) I think your main problem was telling and not showing. Often you explained that you felt sorry, or were unconvinced etc. ...

    Jun 17, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Excerpt from WWII Novel

    Hero here to R(elay) and E(xplain) my VIEW of this. Okay, firstly let me say I really dislike historical war stories - especially those of more modern days. But whatever ...

    Jun 16, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: For the Love of God, Chapter 3

    Okay, I've skimmed and read the story and unfortunately, I don't think you've given this much. If this is humorous, then let it be humorous in full. It's not very ...

    Jun 12, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Distant Ship

    Okay, I'm here-ish. I can't give you a full scale review, sadly. Here's what I can say Firstly, just a bit of fact confusion. They are going to drive to ...

    May 22, 2010
  • Other » General, General Re: inside

    Heyo! Aloud should be allowed. Besides that, no nit-picks. I think though you should change all the "it"'s to My tears because I found myself wondering what "It"? Also, this ...

    Apr 26, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: My Special Place

    *grumble, grunmble* Hey Kay, this was really amazing and as soon as the *LIKE* button comes back, I shall click it. I've never written anything with imagery like this. If ...

    Apr 26, 2010


For in everything it is no easy task to find the middle ... anyone can get angry—that is easy—or give or spend money; but to do this to the right person, to the right extent, at the right time, with the right motive, and in the right way, that is not for everyone, nor is it easy; wherefore goodness is both rare and laudable and noble.
— Aristotle