Lora

ummm....yes thank you for the crits. it is indeed a rough, so i will fix it accordingly. i am sorry if it wasn't as orginal as everyone would like it, ...

i liked this quite alot. also claudette is right, the capital letters aren't right. but i really liked it other than that, it was great. muy bien! ---Lora

hmmmm....i had to read it once over again, but i think that i finally understood it. don't worry, i like to write short poems ot, especially if it makes sense ...

I really liked this. for the first chapter the info was thrown in there, but i liked it anyways. i really think that you should continue writing this peice. i ...

I agree...i think that i would enjoy this much better as a story. not that it wasn't good as a poem, but i think that....oh who really cares what i ...

hmmm....i liked it well enough. actually it's probally better than some of mine! (that's true) i almost didn't really like the rhythm...i'm not to sure why, but i didn't really ...

Thanks... I have longer poems in the work, but i'm rather picky to the ones i'm thinking about posting. So thank you, and i hope that you will read my ...

Lo Ciento! no, you're right...i did spell disapearing wrong...great... it wasn't really meant to be to long. i don't like poems that drag things on to much, so i like ...

Hey, this poem just doesn't do it for me. i think that it may be the rhyming, but i'm no expert either. just try to let it out more...oh geez, ...