LucidDreamerLost

heh, yeah buddy. I like it, I do I do I do, yeah buddy. The ending's weird, ends as "we're alive," but every indication...shows that he's/she's gonna die. Erm? Just ...

haha, I like it a lot. "Someone please give me an illusion of a miraculous cabaret shining into eternity. For the first time my layers are transparent. Above me lies ...

I'm a writing major in college, so lemme give this a little going-over... Prologue, Part One: The Day the World Knew Sunday evening in an astrology laboratory deep inside the ...

wow, awesome. Real good words, real good feeling. I like it. "Laugh, cerise lips, on the jade knoll, Slow over the fruitless, undulance of sleep. Beguile the loveless, the lifeless, ...

you should put an accent mark over the e in "cursed" (first line)--improves the flow, just feels right. Again on 3rd line of 3rd stanza. Fifth stanza, I don't know ...

first paragraph...seems very mature, definitely for an older audience. imaginable, imaginable (paragraph 2) [ edited out ]I got no further. peace This is a young writers' site. Please keep the ...

If I had written this, I would be super-proud of it. Kudos, my man. It's f***ing brill Please no swearing in comments, even if it's meant to be a compliment. ...