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Lydia1995

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Poison

    Hello! I see someone already got in the nit-picks before me. Don't say that this fails!! Because it dosn't, it is very good, paticularly with the formatting off it, which ...

    Jan 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Forever Lost

    Hello Kayay :D I really liked this and like Snicker said your rhymes make sense and don't seem too forced. There are some mistakes, mostly punctuation towards the end but ...

    Jan 30, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Untitled Story

    Hello! I'm Lydia and I will be your reviewer for today :) Firstly Welcome To YWS. You have come to a good place were people can help you to improve ...

    Jan 30, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: i am an idiot

    Vanadis, This is pretty good. The rhythm was a bit out but for someone who dosn't generally write poetry this is great! Well Done! I loved it aticularly some of ...

    Jan 30, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Kaelynne's LOve Story

    Hello White! I see that everyone has pulled this apart already so I'll just say that I liked it. You portrayed the emotion of the only girl without a boyfriend ...

    Jan 29, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Life: A Game of Tag

    Hello! As others I liked it, I was a bit dissapointed with the end though. 'He wins' seemed a bit anit-climatic. You could put something really dramatic in here for ...

    Jan 29, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: zimbabwe

    Hello, I liked this, but I think that if you really want to portray your emotions, tell us how you felt leaving. I know the feeling of moving house, and ...

    Jan 29, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: They say love.

    Hello, I really like this, it has a clear message, that yes you don't always get what you deserve and that love is never easy. So i really like it, ...

    Jan 29, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Prologue. (prologue) not so long anymore!

    Hello, Welcome YWS Unfortunately I don't have the patience to read all of that, nor the time. I would suggest breaking this up into chapters so that this huge amount ...

    Jan 29, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Fallen Apple

    Hello! I'm Lydia and I will be your reviewer today. :D Ok so to start with I noticed that you haven't done any reviews, try to review more peoples work ...

    Jan 28, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Religion

    Hello Dreamy, I liked this, and I actually can't see many things to tear apart with it. I would say though that this line, Perhaps someday in the future It ...

    Jan 28, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Short story

    Hello, Welcome to YWS may I just say! :) So yes I think everything has been said really, please extended your story because I would like to know who these ...

    Jan 27, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Man Below My Terrace

    Hello! I liked this, well done :) I think you really portrayed the characters emotions and thoughts really well. And your rhythm was consistent thanks to the "a-blahblah." Your rhyme ...

    Jan 26, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: FATHER-LESS

    Hello Percy, I'm Lydia and I will be your reviewer! Welcome to YWS :) Ok so firstly I would like to say that I noticed you didn't have any reviews ...

    Jan 26, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Natural Disaster

    Hello, I really liked this, was I right in thinking that in a way it was two poems in one. Because the rhyme scheme for all the bits about the ...

    Jan 25, 2010


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