M.B.Author

Just a little back ground, this is about my grandmother who is dying of cancer. She lives kinda far away, so I don't see her very often. And this is ...

Hm...interesting. I really don't know what to say. I heard you wanted crit, but I am not the kind who has those page long speeches on how to improve. So, ...

Wow, that was kinda freaky and creepy. I liked the starting, I really liked the starting. Your writing is good. Cannot wait to hear more! -- M.B.Author

Winter is not the same, When you aren't here, I know I cannot be here to blame. The Christmas lights are gleaming, But,they look duller this year, And I don't ...

:shock: Awesome. Way good. I like it! -- M.B.Author

I like this allot. I don't know why, I somewhat fond this childish, though. Oh! I LOVE the last line. Genius! Keep on writing! -- M.B.Author

I think that it is just the perfect length. This is very good. Some parts though had no ryme I think, and were a little bad. Over all I really ...

Yeah! Part 13. I am very sad now, I have to WAIT for part 14. This is coming along good. I like M. He seems real nice. He's a good ...

Agree with other crits is sadly a hobby of mine. There is something missing. I agree that this is a little to short. Looking forward to 13! -- M.B.Author

Just wanted to say: Good Job! You are doing so good. You are totally adding suspense to the story and I am wanting to read one part to the next. ...

Yes! Excitment (no coment on the swearing).lol Okay, you said: “Darling,” Laura’s voice sliced through the now icy air. She hurried over to Tom and draping her arms over her ...

Okay like the PJ thing, I thought they were spelled wrong, and I was right (I am not a good speller). You said: Mum making what smelt like Um...Smelt? I ...

The characters in the story have really progressed. From being sad and depressed and screaming, yelling, they have, well, matured somewhat. And I think this story has really matured too. ...

Wow, this is going along great. The characters are outstanding. I am so glad she and Tom are back together. This story is so cool. Keep up the good work. ...

Oh! P.S. I ment to tell you, a while back ago, that the first two or three wre kinda short. And I am really glad you are making your parts ...