M.B.Author

There was no depth to it. See, I liked it. But, what was the meaning of writing this. What was the purpose of the poem. Is there more then meets ...

For a prologue it was pretty good. For a story, it seems boring. But, I think it might turn into something good. I'll watch this. I liked this part: I ...

I love this. I do think that maybe some of the parts thought the whole story was kinda boring. But, I still love this. The ending was so heart breaking. ...

Aww, how cute. I love this. It is really nice. One thing, other then all the little miss spells, a little grammar probs. You said: “How are we going to ...

Hm...interesting. I really don't know what to say. I heard you wanted crit, but I am not the kind who has those page long speeches on how to improve. So, ...

Yeah! Part 13. I am very sad now, I have to WAIT for part 14. This is coming along good. I like M. He seems real nice. He's a good ...

Yes! Excitment (no coment on the swearing).lol Okay, you said: “Darling,” Laura’s voice sliced through the now icy air. She hurried over to Tom and draping her arms over her ...

Okay like the PJ thing, I thought they were spelled wrong, and I was right (I am not a good speller). You said: Mum making what smelt like Um...Smelt? I ...

The characters in the story have really progressed. From being sad and depressed and screaming, yelling, they have, well, matured somewhat. And I think this story has really matured too. ...

Yeah! Part 6. Very good, yes, very good. I too was wondering when you said about M's name. I was like, okay, are you going to tell me his name ...

Oh! I sooooooooo hope she doesn't abort the baby. This story is coming around so good! I think I might have spotted a typo or something somewhere like maybe a ...

Hmmm....wow. A lot happening. On part to I had a hunch she was pregnant. I liked how you have written all of this so far. I like how you go ...

Awesome (I told you I would read more!). I soooo want to read more of this. You got me hooked. And a cliff-hanger too! You are such a good writer. ...

Very good writing. You made me get hooked immediately and I want to read more (which I will). You brought the main character out right away, which I really think ...

I like this too. And, yeah, why the colon? Was that a typo or why is it there? I like the message, the sermon if you may that this poem ...