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:shock: Awesome. Way good. I like it! -- M.B.Author

I like this allot. I don't know why, I somewhat fond this childish, though. Oh! I LOVE the last line. Genius! Keep on writing! -- M.B.Author

I think that it is just the perfect length. This is very good. Some parts though had no ryme I think, and were a little bad. Over all I really ...

Agree with other crits is sadly a hobby of mine. There is something missing. I agree that this is a little to short. Looking forward to 13! -- M.B.Author

Just wanted to say: Good Job! You are doing so good. You are totally adding suspense to the story and I am wanting to read one part to the next. ...

Wow, this is going along great. The characters are outstanding. I am so glad she and Tom are back together. This story is so cool. Keep up the good work. ...

Oh! P.S. I ment to tell you, a while back ago, that the first two or three wre kinda short. And I am really glad you are making your parts ...

OMG! This story is getting better and better! I am so I have been devouring this story going from one part to the next! I just cannot stop reading! You ...

Hm...What can I say about this? Well, I liked this. Not the best though of your work. -- M.B.Author

Dido both crits. Like the other peeps, it was kinda like all about you. It felt like there was not allot of emotion in it. I don't know, just something ...

I liked this. I liked how you described the leaf, rock, and the mountain. Good Job! You are getting the hang of writing poems. -- M.B.Author P.S. You are not ...

I liked this, but I am sorry I cannot give you much advise, for I don't know much about poetry. But I like this allot. Best of luck, -- M.B.Author

I thought that was baeutiful! I love this part: You say: While I lose myself in your eyes, Ocean blue, Drawing me ever closer; to the sea. I think that ...

I feel so bad for you! I am so sorry. :( I echo everyone above me. It was a little blockish. And a way I think could capture your readers ...

I WANT MORE! :laughs: I liked this. A true epic. Good choice. I think you did quite well. I would really like to hear more. PLease post, -- M.B.Author