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A good use of questions, the poem makes the reader think. I can't really offer much constructive criticism. I like the rhyme of "see", "mortality" and "behind", "inside" - it ...

You use some very good rhymes, "her" and "Myrrh", "raised" and "amazed" just to name a few. Because the rhyme is so inventive it adds a new layer to the ...

Silence of the world surrounds Beating pulsing like a heart I think you need a comma in there or something, definitely between "beating, pulsing". These first two lines leave me ...

Okay, the content of the poem is good - you just need to work on the punctuation. The poem reads like a solid block at the moment if there were ...

Very nice imagery throughout the whole poem. Twirling we fall into ribbons of midnight gold A very nice phrase, adds a lot to the poem. Nice piece of contrast with ...

The rhythm is a bit off, you go from short concise lines to much longer ones. It might work if they were different stanzas but it just stops the flow ...

Sorry about that - I wasn't sure about the spelling so I just copied it from one of the previous posts.

I haven't read the pretties/uglies/specials, but I rather liked Scott Westerfeld from his midnighters series. Anyone read that? I think I'll go out an try and find these books since ...

I'd say a 8/10. I'm not quite sure what it is, but I like it - In an abstract kinda way.

Something we did in school today. Basically you fill in the blanks with the right form of the word (Adjective, noun, adverb etc). Orange ________ (noun/s) Fly(s) _________ (adverb) In ...

A walk down an empty street, Or down a covered freeway. Works nicely to create a setting. The use of the word "Covered" doesn't seem quite right tho. It makes ...

Well, I get mixed feelings from this poem. It reads a bit too much like prose at times, yet it still is good. The informality helps the reader connect, which ...

Very nice. I can't see you does that make me blind? I can't hear you does that make me deaf? That all works very well, involves the senses and so ...

And yes I must agree Amelia :) But random is good!

Very nice. The short line are extremely effective and the way that they run onto each other even more so. I like the way that you made "small brown house", ...