MadamKroft

I'll be sure to edit it after school to fix those periods! I also need SO MUCH HELP with present and past tense! It's going to take a long tome ...

Finished Editing! I've now: -Provided more detail. -Lengthened the chapter. -Changed the price to be more reasonable for future chapters. -Attempted to fix past and present tense issues. Check it ...

I'm currently working on it! :)

Thanks! I absolutely love your review. Even though we know each other in person, we can both be equally honest about each others work. :) Be prepared for me to ...

Alphonse Velazquez name will be later explained. Thank you so much for this review, it really means a lot to know what others are thinking about when reading my work. ...

By the way, I'm a newbie and may often confuse comments for reviews, but yours was kind of both! :) I'll get the hang of it in time.

Thank you for the review! I will make sure to watch out about my tenses, but it may take a couple times of practice to sort it out. I'm glad ...

Don't worry, I will! :)

@Wolfare1 -Thank you! Thank you! Thank you! I make a lot of mistakes and no has ever specifically pointed them out to me! I'm terrible with past and present tense. ...