MamaLama95

Good poem, if a little long and drawn-out. It got too emo-ish towards the end for me, but it had some powerful images and very interesting themes throughout. It felt ...

This poem felt a little forced, and too unemotional for me. It was interesting, and I can relate to it, but it's lacking very much in some sort of deep ...

Your poem wasn't the typical slash-kill-die emo crap I read here sometimes, and you score points for that. However, I do think that it was a little long, and you ...

I think this has probably been my favourite work today. It's so bouncy and lyrical - honestly, it's fantastic. There are a few nitpicks, such as grammar, and a faltering ...

Lots of emotion, and it's clear that there's a history behind these words - I applaud you. I did have some issues with the first two or three stanzas, because ...

I have to agree with my predecessor here - your punctuation use was very scattered and not altogether great. I loved all the deep and intense imagery you conveyed, and ...

I really do love this poem - it possesses this powerful and utterly compelling emotion which you put across in a really beautiful and developed way. It's so clear that ...

This is a relatively shorter work, but it's deeply personal. I hope you enjoy it. ________________________________________________________________ Standing on my roof, all alone. All I need is someone

You overuse the word 'frozen' in some of the stanzas, but if you found good enough substitutes, then this poem would be fantastic. You've got quite a good grasp of ...

Thank you to everyone who reviewed - I can definitely see all my mistakes and it's nice to know that they can be fixed relatively quickly. Especially thanks to Toto, ...

Crash. It’s all it takes. Like gravity, like madness, Just a little push: And everything leaves. You’re paralyzed. You can’t breathe, speak or live, It’s all gone. Taken in a ...

I like what you're trying to portray; however, the last lines of your stanzas are so forced, it's making me physically gag. Change those, definitely, because you're desperately trying to ...

Quite brilliant in fact. Good meter, you've got a grasp on punctuation and grammar, as well as vocabulary. Beautiful theme.

Quite brilliant in fact. Good meter, you've got a grasp on punctuation and grammar, as well as vocabulary. Beautiful theme.

I quite liked the poem - it was a nice idea, but it got really boring by the middle. No punctuation or correct use of grammar bothered me to no ...