Maricore

Its all said by the narrator, I didn't switch at all xD its just the narrator knows it all perspective. Secondly he watched his brother die on TV in the ...

Thank you very much! I will watch out for the very useful information you gave me! I will be reading the hole chapter again once I have enough time to ...

Oh yeah I get it, but I understand how to correct it, I mean I can't find it in the chapter :P I read the thing twice and I don't ...

Okay I think I get it, if it describes words ad commas and don't capitalize the first word. If describes body language, use periods and capitalize. But I just want ...

.... That's it. I can't do this, I might as well stop this series :l I can't follow those mistakes! I don't even understand what you're saying!

I apologise for making this reading uncomfortable for you, and thank you solo much for all those links! Especially the talking heads one (I obviously really needed it ._.) I ...

That k you such for the link you sent me, it helped fix a lot of my mistakes (realising I had so many...omg xD) I tried to revise as much ...

I'm sorry if this chapter sounded very off but it does take right where it left in chapter 1 Also I don't use italic because I use it in flashbacks ...

Alright :) noted and will be remembered :D

The italic font is used in falsh backs by any of the character, and this was supposed to confuse you. To be fair he got a flash back before he ...

Ehm....sir if I knew what they are, I would have fixed them...

Oh your welcome :) You can tag me with the first chapter of this story when its out for me to read it :D

That's okay! Take your time ^^

Its alright :) there is nothing to apologize for :) I fairly enjoyed it so thak you for putting it up for us to read :D