Matt3187

Hey, I really liked your piece. Personally i prefered the first segment as it had more action, though i did also enjoy the exceptional narrative of the further sections. However ...

Hey this is a promising so far. What you have is a nice introduction to the story and is well written and the puncuation, grammer, spelling etc etc is to ...

OK, first of all ill remind the two reviews for one post rule. If you do a couple of reviews more people are likely to review yours. I do like ...

Hey i really like this. It is well written and desriptive yet still suspenceful enough for me to be encouraged to read on., However i did notice one thing i ...

Wow. A Bellatrix narrative, i think it must be a first. Not that thats a problem of course, and harry potter fanfiction is an interesting fanfiction. I liked reading it, ...

I could have just said ‘because I hate writing’ and walk away but I couldn’t do that because: A) I love writing, just not novels and, B) She would bug ...

Heya. I like the idea of a Lupin story and i see great potential for it. However i feel there are a couple of things that could be improved. I ...

Well i will echo some of the comments made. Nothing has really happened. I mean to be honest you probably could have grouped this with the first chapter to make ...