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Ohhh..thank you very much. Very good improvement. After rereading it, I saw that it was very akward...and one moan was definitely enough. I think I got carried away with it ...

This is still a prologue...a very long one at that. I'm just here to critique the prologue enjoy and tell me your thoughts^_^ ******* "Huhhhh....." whimpered a small naked lump ...

I know this may sound very bad Clover Madison, but Mary Beth is actually only about 9. I want to picture her as a very "disturbed", but eloquent heroine. I ...

My favorite story from Roald Dahl is definitely FAntastic Mr. Fox. My 8 year old mind read it, and loved it.