MerleBlackbird

Well, I can say your tone and mood are on point for following that of the show. This writing definitely reflects the grotesque realism and the whole set of characters ...

Dannnnggg this is written so well!! I love how you leverage the unreliable narrator here. At first, the reader assumes the story is about a young woman named Daisy who ...

So here's my initial know-nothing reaction: The story seems to be about a vampire, hiding from the locals, living alone and struggling (but used to it.) The story seems to ...

Once AGAIN, this chapter feels like a massive improvement over the last. You're seriously getting better and better at slowing down and really getting into the description and images. It's ...

I knew this would happen!! It's super sad to see Sako and Yagi's friendship strained like this. It's especially sad to see Yagi forced to be AFRAID of Sako!!! Leader ...

Apparently Ramien did not want Jaith to finish that sentence heh. Annnnnd Miki shows up for the first time hugging a tree. Chapter 2 had very good description. And, I ...

*Gasp!* You can't just end a chapter here!! What--what--noooooo!! Okay, yes I suppose you can. Technically, this is a very clever cliffhanger. But it's definitely cliffhangering me!! It looks like ...

This is SO SAD!! Yagi is really falling apart without his friend. It makes me want to cry what he said before he passed out. He's such a sweet friend! ...

Aw come on! I had a feeling this might happen, but it's still super sad to see it. I really hate that Sako and Yagi's friendship is being affected by ...

Wow! Finally some answers! But... Things are looking nonetheless grim. I still really hope that Yagi and Sako can survive, they seem to have a really great friendship and I've ...

I knew things were going to get worse... Ahhhggghhh!!! But I wasn't expecting this!! Yagi must feel so lonely with his one and only friend suddenly not acting like himself. ...

Hahaha Doctor knows Yagi and Sako are full of trouble! 😆 Man, I still want to ask a ton of questions! But I'll wait and read and figure things out ...

Hahaha well now I think I understand the story a lot better (surprise, surprise) so the two characters Yagi and Sako seem to be captives/patients of some kind. Judging from ...

Oh my gosh, I love this! I might have finally found something on here that really grabs my interest? Of course this is chapter 2, but just watch I'm fixing ...

Before I get extra rambly, I have two words for this piece: dark realism. The writing feels very real, detailed, and lifelike. It's hard to sympathize with any of the ...