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Re: Jikken-yō nezumi
Hey there! Happy Review Day from the pumpkin teeeam. Let's hop right in. I'm not going in any specific order but just jotting down some thoughts. 1. I always love ...
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Re: Breaking
It seems everyone is getting in on the spooky fun eh? Let's go through this and I'll make a few points for you to consider! 1. Overall, good vibes. I ...
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Re: Sinister Magick- Chapter 4: Sinister Reading
Alright. Let's do this ooone laaast tiiime 1. Valid thoughts by Minerva in the beginning. You haven't stated it but it seems that her upbringing was not only rough, but ...
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Re: Sinister Magick- Chapter 3: Perfume & Alcohol
I'm still a'comin! Let's get right to it. 1. My overall thought is that this feels like half a chapter, or that the last chapter and this one should be ...
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Re: Sinister Magick- Chapter 2: A Deal with a Goddess
Back for Round Two! Just a quick note again about tense, and I won't being it up again. We've got past where it should be and present where it should ...
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Re: Sinister Magick - Chapter 1: Reality
Happy Review Day fellow Pumkin! It seems that Minerva would get straight to the point, so I will as well. Let's check out a few things. 1. Tense - not ...
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Re: Swaying through Seasons: A Forest's Farewell
Happy Review Day fellow Pumpkin ;) I don't know what it is, but the poetry today is so mixed with beauty and grief xD no happy poems for me I ...
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Re: Voices - Chapter 1
Hey there, and Happy Reciew Day from team Punpkin Pie Orange! I've got a few thoughts on this opening chapter, so let's hop in. 1. I actually love your opening ...
Oct 28, 2023 -
Re: Sole
Hey there and Happy Review Day! There's a lot going on I'm this poem, and some interesting themes that are at war with each other. I like the progression from ...
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Re: Tales From Anxietyland - The Bleaching Shack
Hey there! Happy Review Day :) let's get spookin' I've been meaning to write a short story for Halloween and have failed to do so, but it seems that you ...
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Re: Romance in the Veins of Noir
Hey there! Happy Review Day! Your blurb and title caught my eye. So I thought I'd get a ticket and catch a flick while I was in town. I'm not ...
Oct 28, 2023 -
Re: Meaning of Words
Hey there! Welcome, welcome, welcome and Happy Review Day! Let's hop right in, ya?! On the macro, welcome to ever writing anything xD This entire thing is me when I ...
Oct 28, 2023 -
Re: Existential
Ugh I am so in love with your style already. I'm not even a naturally poetic person, and don't always review poetry on here because I don't feel like I'm ...
Oct 28, 2023 -
Re: Father Time
Hey there! Welcome to YWS and Happy Review Day! I don't know if this was intentional, or just YWS messing with your spacing, but I think that having 0 stanzas, ...
Oct 28, 2023 -
Re: Rushing
Hey there! Happy Review Day and welcome to YWS :) Let's hop in, shall we? In the first line I believe a comma is in order after "I walk". In ...
Oct 28, 2023