Messenger

this chapter is very good. I like that although we don't know a lot about Tessa, you still don't give us a history of her, and yet I still get ...

OK, here to review. This isn't like any of your other writing, but never mind about that. I have to say I'm not really that interested in the story at ...

Hey, unlike most prologues this one is not an info dump about the history of your story, which is great. Your description of the setting is superb. Even the little ...

OK, wow, that was really good! It's an interesting point of view, but I like it. However, I'm a little confused as to your rhyming. At first I thought it ...

This is really good paradox. it captures love very well, and the way you describe it is very nice. It’s a double edged sword, can drive a man to death ...

This was awesome! you are so descriptive, every line goes perfectly with the next one (something that honestly isn't easy to do at all) the rhymes are all just right. ...

I have to say this poem was well done, (although I don't necessarily agree with it all) but the descriptive words really bring the poem to life. But I have ...

This wasn't a long poem, but masterfully done. The words you used to describe then new world were perfect for catching the feeling you wanted. I see you made lines ...

This is great and funny. Your rhyming was all good except for this one line. There are only five empty slots, but no way to tell which is full I ...

hmm . . . At first I was a bit upset, thinking the character wouldn't be able to remember anything for a while. But then he went back to the ...

This is an interesting approach to take with this story, and one I think is clever. Your details of the monsters trek to hall was great! I could feel the ...

Interesting prologue. I'm a bit confused as to what is happening, perhaps chapter 1 will help. You need some help however. Each time a character speaks you need to start ...

Cool idea, this is only the second time I've seen this done. The short scene left me wanting more, both characters seem strong and brave, I'd like to see them ...

OK, so cool idea, but some problems I noticed in it. 1. Most of your lines don't rhyme very smoothly, they seem forced. Through various processes i do go, Malliebility ...

Another great chapter! This chapter was nearly as long as the prologue, yet I couldn't quit reading it. Looking into Latae's life was a good switch from the previous two ...