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Haha the baby thing isn't anything to die over so xD

Hey, thanks for being so fast! Yes this is for 5 and 6. I didn't want to waste points splitting up the chapter since it all goes together. The bit ...

hahaha I'm sorry XD That would be a problem

hahaha I'm sorry XD That would be a problem

malcolm's dad o.O

hey dood :D :D thanks for stopping by. first off I don't know why, but the fight scene reminded me of the one in Mulan where the Hun army is ...

thanks Bisc! I'll definitely make a note about her mom. She is bitter at life, and there's a lot that goes into it. this isn't really a spoiler so I'll ...

Hey Blue thanks for such a fast review :D I will say that I really wanted to make this chapter long enough to have Carris and Devlin meet (and they ...

Haha i gotcha. Sounds like me most of the time

hey Bisc, thanks. Yeah, a lot of what you say here echoes what Blue said below. As for the little bit about Malcolm not seeing his dad's reaction, it originally ...

hey Bisc, thanks. Yeah, a lot of what you say here echoes what Blue said below. As for the little bit about Malcolm not seeing his dad's reaction, it originally ...

Okay. Obviously for now during LMS I'll leave it as is, but I'll make a note about that in my novel planning notebook

thanks blue. So I was wanting to give each MC two chapters of intro, and that would lead to the end of next chapter having Devlin come running in. So ...

ok yeah, I'll make a note of it for rewrites. I really intended to have more backstory in this chapter, but idk it just ended up being really short

okay, maybe just talking to Frasier for longer or something? Mentioning Sadorians and where the rest of the army is etc?