Messenger

I don't know what to say. This is so good! It is really making me want to read the rest of the story!!

the POv's shouldn't pose a big problem. I haven't heard anyone state anything about it yet, and i've had about 15 people read at least some bits of the story. ...

"Comma after before.

so very punny it makes me smile xD

gaah i really need to revise this chapter. Miles is 15, Castor 17, Kalan is about 19. i had a prologue but it was cut out. it would have explained ...

Well that was fast! "Hello Castor, been sleeping inn" There's an extra n there. It was a pun. the double N is intentional. As for the thoughts, the amount diminishes ...

tank you BLue i had these typos and stuff fixed up, but i must've gotten the wrong draft (i have it in two different places) and this is the grammarly ...

i think it would move faster if they were not in parts, but for easy reading and reviewing, i'm leaving in parts right now.

hmm . . . i had those typos corrected. i must have copy-pasted from the wrong spot. i shall get dem fixeded soon

I mentioned founders Day back in chapter 1 or 2 :P

it's a neutral feeling XD The last line was really interesting . . .

oh . . . ok

what did I just read . . .

there were a few messups like the deleted line before "as long as it's food i'm gonna E-eat it anyway" my bad :(

I understand! I feel the same way, only vica versa. If you need any help let me know!