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OK, I haven't edited any since Tuesday, but come back sometime tomorrow if you can, and I should have it edited. I'll try to add some more stuff for the ...

OK, I have a choice to make. I have thoughts in italic the rest of the book. I would like to add thoughts, but for Kanufu there is somethhing in ...

What do you mean by previously? This is chapter three of the story, so you may be confused by that.

OK, I thought those rhymes may have been unintentional, it clears everything up. I like the way you did it. i think having just that one repeated phrase really helps ...

Not to sound dumb, but how exactly were you looking for more fro mthe fighting, like what is it that you want more of? Is it what is going on ...

OK, you guys did your job to good. This is gonna take some time to edit.

I really want to be able to go into some of the lifestyles and more detail of the towns and such and that will require research. luckily though for right ...

wow! Creepy poem. totally didn't see that coming. That was terrifying. very good description, i liked how you wrote it. you had a part you wrote beet instead of beat. ...

So i edited some. I cut out some of the history, introduced the names within others sentences, added a little bit of interaction from the crowd. Hope you like it. ...

Nah, just kind of cheap.

wow, long review, but very helpful. This is a rough draft so yes there are some probs. I'll work on the imagery and setting, as well as trying to get ...

Yes. Yes! YES! This is awesome! So glad I could make it so fun to read and yes this chapter ends perfectly I thought. Glad to hear it's going smoother. ...

you realize you are getting in the featured column because you have the most likes, because you are liking your own chapters?

Creepy sounding story. well written, you hooked me to it. I'll look forward to the next chapter.

Great great great poem! This was such a fun and easy poem to read. A great story and very descriptive writing. The lines all rhyme perfect and are fast to ...