Messenger

You could perhaps divide the chapter at the end of the poem as well as at the beginning of the desert scene.

One more thing. although this is your decision, I would suggest you shortening the chapters. At least for me, when I sit down at my laptop to read I like ...

This was well done. I have to say that the you are disgusting could refer to so many things in life, could even be replaced by others words such as ...

Sometimes there are characters that aren't really a big part of the story, but they can still grab your attention with their actions.

No suggestions at the moment, but I'm writing a book entitled Is It a Dream. In my book I'm outside one day playing in the woods when I slip and ...

That was amazing! So many emotions so perfectly described. Sad but hopeful at the same times with a powerful message. Great job, you have a gift at this.

Haha. Very funny poem. My family has a cat and it isn't very fat, but it has a ton of fluffy hair that makes her look real big.

Short and great! I can just see the darkness, then in the center a small speck of light begins to form, eventually bursting forth into colorful rays of light. A ...

Still enjoying. I like how you've portrayed Jenna, Beth, and Shara so far.

This is the first story I've ever read that was written from two people's first-person point of view, but it's great. The suspense it great. I can't wait to see ...

This is the first story I've ever read that was written from two people's first-person point of view, but ti's great. The suspense it great. I can't wait to see ...

This was quick entertaining read. The pace was quick the characters were quite realistic in their speech and attitudes towards each other. I wasn't sure if the brothers were merely ...